This is written for Denise’s Six Sentence Story word prompt – Confetti
We were so young.
It’s not our fault that
we didn’t have time
to rehearse life.
We didn’t understand that
stubborn promises were just a preface.
We loved so hard.
We were so inexplicable,
so endearing,
so annoying,
consumed by seven emotions
and six desires.
It was cold that day,
tears turned into ice,
snowflakes falling down
like confetti,
red-eyed, red-faced.
Very moving poem of two people possibly breaking up, but maybe it will not be so final, especially with “red-eyed, red-faced” at the end. I like how you used confetti to refer to snow.
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First love and young love does leave a lasting memory. Some reunited God’s willing. Some went on to different journey.
Thanks Frank!
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Excellent imagery and very poignant. Great take on the prompt.
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Thank you Doug for your comment.
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It’s so sad, i’ve seen this again and again, and it always hurts to watch.
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Yes tender young love. 😔
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How wonderful this write is, Cassa. Elegant imagery and wonderfully exoressed feelings. Awesomeness.
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First loves rarely last yet leave an indelible mark on our hearts.
A poignant and beautiful piece, C.
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I looked up ‘ 7 emotions and 6 desires’. Interesting information!
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It is actually a Chinese saying. I looked it up too before I wrote it in the poem. I agree with you that it’s interesting. Thank you Reena!
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Beautiful.
Worthy to be a ballad!
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Thank you so much Spira!
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Wow! What a great post, My Dear! Very moving! Now you have me wondering about the 7 emotions and 6 desires and thinking perhaps you might share these with us in a poem/post??? Please? 😁😊💕🌹
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Oh Charles, you have given me a prompt and task.😄
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Beautifully observed ❤🌹
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Ah yes, the one that got away. Beautifully and sensitively written, Carrie.
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Thanks Chris! 💚
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Great six, I enjoyed reading it.
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Thanks Greg!
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Deep, sad, lovely. The perfect ingredients. 🙂
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Thanks Terveen! 💚
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Emotionally gripping. Sad, but pretty at the same time.
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First love is often a stepping stone on the journey to eternal love. I too investigated the seven emotions and six desires, and am pleased I did!
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Beautiful writing. I know this feeling well. You explain it so beautifully Cassa. Big hugs and love ❤️
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